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B&P Shadorma & Beyond – The Hay(na)ku – November 28, 2015

Hello World, this is Bastet presenting another poetic form.

As you can see by our title, the form I’m presenting is called ‘The Hay(na)ku and it’s a fairly recently created form (2003) by poet Eileen Tabios (born 1960)  an award-winning Filipino-American poet and writer well known for her prose poetry.   The Hay(na)ku has become pretty well-known in poetic circles (The name “hay(na)ku” was coined by Vince Gotera).

With a name like hay(na)ku, we know that we’re into micro-poetry and this is just about as micro as you can get!  It’s a tercet with just 6 words – line one is one word, line two – two words and line three – three words.  That’s it. There’s no syllable count or rhyming requirements etc.

However there are variations  –  for example a reverse hay(na)ku which has lines of three, two, and one word(s) for lines one, two, and three respectively or … if one so desires one can write a chained hay(na) ku for a longer poem and Ms. Tabios’ has created a variation, the “haybun,” which combines a single hay(na)ku tercet with prose.

Here’s my attempt at a hay(na)ku variation, with a shadorma ending:

A Shadow

on
the window
a shadow moved

as the rain
in rivulets
fell

was
it him
at the window

looking at me
with silent
tears

none
could say
where he’d gone

wherever it was
it was
far

and
time just
keeps moving on

the clock ticks
the hours
still

rain
falls here
in the mountains

the sun shines
each morning
[sometimes]

a shadow
t’was just a shadow
no, not him
nor his tears
just a trick of light and rain
on my window pane.

© G.s.k. ‘15

And now for some inspiration:

leaf in water

leaf in water

or if you prefer here’s a lovely piece of Celtic music:

 

 

But of course you may wish to inspire yourself with some of your own art work, so feel free to do so … once you’ve written your hay(na)ku  or shadorma (3-5-3-3-7-5 syllable poem) or combination – please tag Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie and B&P Shadorma&Beyond, then link up with our Mr. Linky app.

I hope you have a lovely week and have fun experimenting with the shadorma and hay(na)ku!

Ciao,  Bastet

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About Bastet

I love to read...I like to write...I've travelled the world and seen the sites. I'm past my prime and feel so young, especially when near the young. I'm writing this blog, to remember, to think and to share...with the hopes that someone else will make a comment that will stimulate new thoughts and pathways. Actually, I'm a gabber, so the logical extension of gabbing is blogging! ;-)

30 comments on “B&P Shadorma & Beyond – The Hay(na)ku – November 28, 2015

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  3. Paloma
    November 28, 2015

    What a great form …. this will be a challenge! Love the photo too, dear Bastet 🙂

    • Bastet
      November 28, 2015

      Thanks … I enjoyed finding the form and taking that photo … glad you like it … but it’s no more difficult to write than a haiku … in fact without the syllable barrier it’s sometimes easier!

      • Paloma
        November 28, 2015

        You may be right …. it may be fun too 🙂

      • Bastet
        November 28, 2015

        It is … believe me. I do prefer to to the reverse back and forth to just the straight form … it seems to be more harmonious aesthetically speaking.

      • Paloma
        November 28, 2015

        And it has a diamante appearance too, so there’s a lot going on 🙂

      • Bastet
        November 28, 2015

        Sure is … I liked using the shadorma as a conclusion to the chained hay(na)ku as well … it makes for a nice layout.

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  5. writersdream9
    November 28, 2015

    Love this form and to have my first exposure to it be about water, well they seem to fit perfectly! Thanks Georgia!

    • Bastet
      November 29, 2015

      I’m so happy you enjoy the form … water in oriental thought is associated with winter .. energetically speaking it is the element of life. 🙂

      • writersdream9
        November 29, 2015

        Profound ideas!

      • Bastet
        November 29, 2015

        and very ancient too 🙂

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  7. J Lapis
    November 29, 2015

    Oh WOWZA, this is all kinds of “beyond Wonderful”–love it, can’t wait to try the form; and again, I SO LOVE that photo!!

    • Bastet
      November 29, 2015

      Thanks J! I’m so happy that you enjoy this week’s Shadorma & Beyond and love your enthusiasm! I’m in love with this photo … I guess you might have noticed 😉

      • J Lapis
        November 29, 2015

        Me too–it’s a beautiful shot!

      • Bastet
        November 29, 2015

        🙂

  8. jazzytower
    November 29, 2015

    I like this, interesting combination of the two.

    • Bastet
      November 30, 2015

      Thanks … I liked the combo as well … seemed to complete the write better.

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  10. julespaige
    November 30, 2015

    A lovely tale of shadow and rain…

    I enjoyed this prompt.
    around

    • Bastet
      November 30, 2015

      Glad you enjoyed the prompt! 🙂

  11. eileenrtabios
    November 30, 2015

    THANK YOU, Bastet. A Lovely result. And FYI to you and your readers, other hay(na)ku variations are available at http://eileenrtabios.com/haynaku/haynaku-variations/ where I’ve also added reference to your shadorma ending. Best, Eileen

    • Bastet
      December 1, 2015

      Thank you so very much Eileen for dropping by and reading our post, we’re very honoured indeed! And thanks for this wonderful link and referring my shadorma ending! Best to you too, Georgia (Bastet)

  12. clothespeggedpat
    December 4, 2015

    Great form and I think your particular “reference” show us how it’s done piece is exquisite …. from start to finish … with the reverse play and the shadroma ending …. the piece really works in all aspects and ways … the flow of water … life …. death …. life in death …. death in life …. tears …. streams …. washing …. cleansing …. all beautiful and very reflective imagery … complied with your photograph – beautiful!

    • Bastet
      December 4, 2015

      Thank you pat for this lovely critique of my poem … rarely happens and I really appreciate the analysis that you made .. right on by the way .. as I was indeed speaking about death … the passing of someone close … the shadows of memory … and again, the photo, though not directly related to the poem is also a metaphor … water is of course the symbol of life … and an autumn leave is the dying of summer … I’m happy you enjoyed the use I put to the two forms.

      • clothespeggedpat
        December 4, 2015

        you really did an amazing job with it – it is so heartfelt … yet “comfortable” -if you know what I mean?

      • Bastet
        December 4, 2015

        I do know what you mean … and thank you very much for getting into the poem … if YOU know what I mean. 🙂

      • clothespeggedpat
        December 4, 2015

        XD

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