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heeding Haiku With Chèvrefeuille, December 14th 2016, Mixing It Up, a Haiku Writing Techniques

Welcome at a new episode of Heeding Haiku With …  in this episode I love to introduce a haiku writing technique and challenge you to used it. It’s all about “Mixing It Up“, an example:

summer afternoon
reflected clouds fall apart
like shards

© Chèvrefeuille

In this is haiku I used that technique. Let us look closer to this haiku. In this haiku it is possible to see an action of the author, but also an action of nature. That’s what this technique is about.

Let me give you a short explanation of this haiku writing technique:

What is meant here is mixing up the action so the reader does not know if nature is doing the acting or if a human is doing it. As you know, haiku are praised for getting rid of authors, authors’ opinions, and authors’ action. One way to sneak this in is to use the gerund (-ing added to a verb) combined with an action that seems sensible for both a human and for the nature/nature to do. Very often when you use a gerund in a haiku you are basically saying, “I am. . . ” making an action but leaving unsaid the “I am”. The Japanese language has allowed poets to use this tactic so long and so well that even their translators are barely aware of what is being done. It is a good way to combine humanity’s action with nature in a way that minimizes the impact of the author but allows an interaction between humanity and nature.

Here is an example of a haiku by Jane Reichhold in which she uses this technique:

end of winter
covering the first row
of lettuce seeds

© Jane Reichhold

And here is an example by Basho in which he uses this technique:

meigetsu ya ike o megurite yomosugara

full moon
walking around the pond
all night

© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

This poem can be read with the idea that the moon “walks” around the pond as it seems to go from east to west or that the author walked around the pond the whole night enjoying the full moon. There is an association between the bright, that surface of the moon and the light-reflecting surface of a round pond.

A wonderful technique to use I think. So I am looking forward to your responses.

Have fun!

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About Chèvrefeuille

I am a Dutch haiku poet. And I am the owner and host of the weblog "Carpe Diem, a daily haiku meme" on Blogger (or Blogspot). I am writing haiku since the late eighties and in 2005 I became an international known haiku poet and in 2011 ten of my haiku were included in a worldwide anthology "Spasms of Light". With that anthology I became an even more known haiku poet. In October 2012 I started my daily haiku meme.

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