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B&P’s Shadorma and Beyond: Robert Fagles – September 17, 2016


Greetings, friends of MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie!

For this week we will continue to follow Candy’s lead by reinterpreting an existing poem as a shadorma.

A shadorma is, of course, written with a syllable count of 3/5/3/3/7/5. It can be one stanza or several – so long as each stanza follows 3/5/3/3/7/5.

Today’s poem is “The Starry Night” by Robert Fagles:


The Starry Night

Long as I paint
I feel myself
less mad
the brush in my hand
a lightning rod to madness

But never ground that madness
execute it ride the lightning up
from these benighted streets and steeple up
with the cypress look its black is burning green

I am that I am it cries
it lifts me up the nightfall…..up
the cloudrack coiling like a dragon’s flanks
a third of the stars in heaven wheeling in its wake
wheels in wheels around the moon that cradles round the sun

and if I can only trail these whirling eternal stars
with one sweep of the brush like Michael’s sword if I can
cut the life out of the beast – safeguard the mother and the son
all heaven will hymn in conflagration blazing down
……..the night the mountain ranges down
the claustrophobic valleys of the mad

……..is what I have instead of heaven
……..God deliver me – help me now deliver
……..all this frenzy back into your hands
……..our brushstrokes burning clearer into dawn.

— Robert Fagles



Here is my attempt:

oh, flint-sharp!
each word cuts its way
to the light
and daily
i am disemboweled by
this poet’s madness

– Paloma, 9/10/2016


After you’ve written your Shadorma post it on your own blog. Tag it B&Ps Shadorma and Beyond and MindLoveMisery’sMenagerie, then link it here so we can all read and enjoy your work. Don’t forget to visit and comment on other blogs!

See you again in two weeks!



10 comments on “B&P’s Shadorma and Beyond: Robert Fagles – September 17, 2016

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  2. Risa
    September 17, 2016

    “i am disemboweled by this poet’s madness”…reminds me of Keats as I am reading his letters now.

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  3. Candy
    September 18, 2016

    such emotion! the pain of being a poet (at times)
    thanks for this prompt

    Liked by 1 person

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  5. taleweavering
    September 19, 2016

    I included the older, Don McLean version with mine. I’m not sure I captured the essence of the poet or the painter.
    Wonderful prompt.

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  7. julespaige
    September 19, 2016

    I had me some fun…in all seriousness:
    Toot Sweet?

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  8. julespaige
    September 19, 2016

    Oh, Dear Paloma, Hope things are going better… Hugs.

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