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B&P’s Shadorma & Beyond – February 13, 2016

Gustave Corbet. Oak of Flagey, 1864. WikiArt.

Gustave Corbet. Oak of Flagey, 1864. WikiArt.

Hello Folks … this is Paloma with the latest issue of B&P’s Shadorma & Beyond.

For this week I’d like to introduced the Song That Luc Bat.

This is a Vietnamese form that means “double seven, six, eight”.  Each four-line stanza begins with a rhyming seven-syllable couplet.  This is followed by a six-syllable line and an eight-syllable line.  To link multiple stanzas, make the next stanza’s seven-syllable couplet rhyme with the eight-syllable line from the previous stanza. Some people add an additional seven-syllable rhyming couplet to the end of the poem and call it a “song that luc bat sonnet” (although it isn’t a traditional sonnet).

A (7)
A (7)
B (6)
C (8)

C (7)
C (7)
D (6)
E (8)    […and so on…]

Traveler with lichen bark
crosses time through artist’s spark.
Though mind and tree have passed,
we three speak: Artist, Tree, and Me.

Artist sighs and bends his knee
underneath this weathered king.
Ancient Monarch, chanting,
demands the same from awestruck Me.


Of course, you may also write a shadorma (a non-rhyming six-line poem in 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllables).

Once you’ve written your Song That Luc Bac or Shadorma please tag your post: Mindlovesmisery Menagerie and B&P Shadorma and Beyond then add  your link to the Mr. Linky App below.

Have yourself a great week!



18 comments on “B&P’s Shadorma & Beyond – February 13, 2016

  1. kim881
    February 13, 2016

    Tricky form, but fun!

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  3. julespaige
    February 14, 2016

    A tad tricky with all the counts and rhymes… I did the non-sonnet.
    (and a shadorma too)
    Seasonal Greetings? & Winter Wish

    • Paloma
      February 14, 2016

      Yes… those counts and rhymes are a challenge! I find them really hard now after being in haiku / tanka territory these days 😛

      • julespaige
        February 14, 2016

        I flit with forms… and fiction.
        Challenges are fun though.
        I wish I could get to more of them (prompts – that is).
        But alas… where does the time go?

      • Paloma
        February 15, 2016

        Right out the window… fast as the dickens 😉

      • julespaige
        February 15, 2016

        …not always…
        But much easier on Sundays when I’ve got most of the day to myself. 🙂

      • julespaige
        February 15, 2016

        That is me being fast on prompts…
        but yes time does fly. Balk chicky chicky.

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  5. writersdream9
    February 15, 2016

    I like this form! Thanks, Paloma!

  6. Bastet
    February 16, 2016

    This is an interesting form Paloma, I really like it!

    • Paloma
      February 16, 2016

      I’m so glad 🙂

      • Bastet
        February 16, 2016

        Oddly I’m finding it difficult to pull my concentration together these days…I’ve worked on your prompt all afternoon and the poem just doesn’t gel!

      • Paloma
        February 16, 2016

        Im so sorry!
        But I understand.
        These days I can’t do rhyme at all 😛

      • Bastet
        February 17, 2016

        Sigh .. I’m wondering if this is one of the many consequences of not smoking any more … and if so, if it’ll go away!

      • Paloma
        February 17, 2016

        It will , it will

      • Bastet
        February 19, 2016

        Mah …

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