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heeding haiku with Chèvrefeuille November 25th 2015,”baransu”

frog

Dear friends of MLMM,

Welcome at a new episode of Heeding Haiku With Chèvrefeuille. Last week we had a challenge to write/compose a haibun, so this week it is time for haiku … and this week I have chosen to share a haiku writing technique which I tried to create myself … baransu (Japanese for balance).

I dared to create this haiku writing technique earlier this year (March 2015) and I published on the WWW and enclosed it in an e-book I created. Let me first give you all a short explanation of this new haiku writing technique baransu.

Haiku has three lines as you all know and maybe we can bring balance in those lines, by association. I will give an example (by the way the following haiku are just for explaining Baransu).

Example 1:

‘a walk through the city’ … in this line we can see already a few possible things to associate on e.g. “walk” and “city“. I have chosen to use “walk” to associate on, and came to this 2nd line:
‘step by step I discover’ … in this line the possible associations can be on “step” and “discover“. I have chosen to use “discover” and came to this third line:
‘a newly built world’

Let me bring the three lines to each other than the following haiku will be formed:

a walk through the city
step by step I discover
a newly built world

© Chèvrefeuille

The above haiku is, in my opinion, Baransu, in balance. That balance I have reached through associating on the different images in every line of the above haiku.

clouds_panorama

Example 2:

Let me try to create another ‘baransu‘-haiku, but now I will use a famous haiku by Basho … and yes … there it is again “the frog pond”:

the old pond
a frog jumps into it
sound of water

© Basho (Tr. Chèvrefeuille)

I will start by re-producing the first line here: “the old pond”. What are the possibilities to associate on? I think “old” and “pond” will do. “Old” has to do with ‘classic‘, ‘yesterday‘, ‘age‘, ‘a long time ago’. Which one can I use? I think I will try ‘yesterday‘ to start creating the second line of this “baransu“-haiku. Here is the 2nd line:

‘yesterday … Irises bloomed’ … hm nice line, but what to use to associate on? In this line I can associate on ‘yesterday‘. ‘Irises‘, and ‘bloomed‘. ‘Yesterday‘ has to do with “time”; ‘Irises‘ are purple mostly and ‘bloomed‘ can mean ‘blossoming‘ or ‘decay‘. I will use ‘Irises‘ to associate on and then this line ‘pops-up’, the third line, ‘only a faint purple’.

Now I will bring the three lines together:

the old pond
yesterday … Irises bloomed
only a faint purple

© Chèvrefeuille

What do you think? Are these lines ‘baransu‘, in balance? I think so, but that’s just my humble opinion.

Well … I hope I have challenged you all to try this new haiku writing technique. Here is another “baransu”-haiku to close this episode:

mountain stream
salmon swims to the well in thin air
rebirth of summer

© Chèvrefeuille

Can you find “my path of associations?”

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About Chèvrefeuille

I am a Dutch haiku poet. And I am the owner and host of the weblog "Carpe Diem, a daily haiku meme" on Blogger (or Blogspot). I am writing haiku since the late eighties and in 2005 I became an international known haiku poet and in 2011 ten of my haiku were included in a worldwide anthology "Spasms of Light". With that anthology I became an even more known haiku poet. In October 2012 I started my daily haiku meme.

7 comments on “heeding haiku with Chèvrefeuille November 25th 2015,”baransu”

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  2. Christina Butcher
    November 25, 2015

    Great post, something definitely worth trying

  3. julespaige
    November 25, 2015

    I think without really trying we all try to write with some cohesion, association and balance. Especially with small verse. At least I think I have always done so. But then there are so few rules I do follow…

    I will try this baransu path. Thank you. Love the frog. 🙂

  4. writersdream9
    November 26, 2015

    This was difficult. I hope I came close to being true to this great form! Thanks!

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